Any comments about this poem? - clever things to write on cars
I could not sleep the night before, what you entered for that. Thank you for your comments.
When found his
For lovers hid disappeared
I agree to take one day
lost, perhaps on the edge of a sea
where we run the world, you and me.
We discover that nobody has seen,
To invent words and to forget what they mean
Sitting on the hill and watched the stars,
Travel on the train and drive old cars.
We ship with toys in hand,
then start a new adventure, as it will be moved inland.
Let us laugh and love and for always
We hope and dream and be intelligent.
All these things would bet
Too bad you do not know yet.
Wednesday, January 27, 2010
Clever Things To Write On Cars Any Comments About This Poem?
4 comments:
For a poem to be written in a fit of insomnia and published here is really very good. Rima, and, more importantly, has about the same number of syllables in each line. The images in the lines "We are sailors from the earth ..." sounds a little artificial for reasons of rhyme, but it is harder to implement than the criticism from the rest of the poem. This is sufficient to take him to a singer to somebody to speak to a song out.
This is a beautiful poem. Of rhyme and image, it's all very well. And a poem in a state of anxiety is written very very very good.
Cute and a bit extravagant.
that's really good to read and not once did I worry love poems How It Ends
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